[livejournal.com profile] sixersfan said last night that--while he's interested in Raine and Dnnys individually--he's not interested in Raine/Dnnys. But I think that's a good thing. It's obvious to him that there is some potentiality for Raine/Dnnys, but there's no substance. But there shouldn't be substance yet. Dnnys barely registers on Raine's radar. She can't afford to take her attention away from Altairon, and so she doesn't really see Dnnys yet. So I think it's a good thing.

I really like the fact that she's NOT waiting for him when he wakes up. She's grateful, but she has other things to worry about, and he's her friend, but he's not her first consideration. It's a bit of a nice insight into Raine's character. Because of the nature of her relationship with Altairon, she is a little self-involved.
So. Day 1 was not so fabulous at just over 1100 words. Day 2 was much better; upped my total output to 4004. I was really hoping to be able to get more writing done at work; figures that this is the time work explodes into busyness after months of drag. I still don't feel I've hit my rhythm. I'm not sure when/if I will. It's strange to revisit this, especially with all my notes and old drafts in Chicago. It keeps me honest, but I keep getting stuck on stupid things like Raine's mother's name (Riawn) or whether Garth's last name was Tamarlane or not (I don't remember) or what was the name of Veliana's beau (Travis? Wait...it was TREVAYNE! HA!)

My practical mind says fuck it, just RENAME them already and go on, but that doesn't stop me from picking and worrying at it. Dog with bone, that's me.

Also, I'm having a really hard time with the language. It's been a real long while since I've written straight high fantasy. It's so very different from the worlds I've been exploring in fanfic, or Storm Moon or Symbiosis. Going back to fantasy...I feel like my prose is SO purple, and fanfic has made me so wary of physical description. Got to stay away from jewel tones to describe eyes. Raine's hair is black. But how do I get the right shade/texture without being able to use descriptors like raven-wing, midnight, onyx... What are the acceptable descriptors for that type of thing without screaming MARY SUE, MARY SUE!?

If I make Raine too thin, I feel like I'm copping to one stereotype; if I make her stacked, it's another. Flat chested, curvy...same thing. IS there any way I can make her look that's not going to set someone off...and why the hell do I care, anyway?

I know that the point is to just WRITE...and that's what I'm doing; but there doesn't seem to be a way to shut down that inner editor. Or really, not even editor...more like my inner fan wanker. I've become Mary-Sue paranoid, praise the fen. Geez.

Fundamentally, this is also a different story, though the basic structure is the same. So there's some wobbling back and forth over 'do I really need this?', 'couldn't I just get rid of Niko altogether?', and 'where DOES Trevayne really come into this anymore?'

The sad part is that I still think this is easier than if I'd come to it from a blank slate. I am a bloody masochist.
Okay...OMG, NaNo starts TOMORROW, and I can't for the life of me remember what about Jeela was so fucking special that she managed to create the Barrier...



I DO remember.

She was hooked into the Net. She used the Net to create the Barrier.




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